Scotch Magic

Scotch Magic
Help Me! Is this Christmas card material? Please help?

I created this and I was wondering is this something you would expect to find on a card Christmas? What do you think of him? I'm trying to get into writing this production that will help me improve my writing and I introduce this as my entry for the Christmas card writing challenge. What areas do you think the job needs? Does it make sense? Melodic carols, sparkling snow, all the help Christmas season to shine, Scotch pine, picturesque living array of Christmas lights all help in making the Christmas season bright, but a simple touch of hugs a kiss of love, kindness and generosity in the midst of, and add to the glare, a pinch of magic, creates the perfect recipe for a Christmas season in its lush beauty, Merry Christmas and fantastic live PS My main focus is: "Live picturesque array of Christmas lights" Thanks:)

is a little much for card … is usually a card or three lines 2, and it is something simple but catchy. your piece is nice and descriptive, but some of the wording was so heavy that it took much imagine what you were trying to put out there. plus you have some grammar problems. shorten up a summary of what he means instead of writing a paragraph. good luck!